As she sat in the coffee shop she kept surreptitiously
looking at her watch.
He was late.
As the waitress came by to refill her cup she nodded her
head slightly, smiled and covered her cup; if she drank another cup she'd be
floating. As it was the caffeine had her tensed up so much she felt like she
could take flight.
She glanced around the coffee shop and noted the customers
there. It was late, way past the dinner rush, closer to midnight actually.
Where was he?
She glanced at her watch again. She didn't have much longer,
and she simply couldn't wait.
She gathered up her purse and her bags, left a tip for the
waitress and headed out the door, the bells jingling as the door swished opened
then shut after her. A fine mist fell over her, the weather was taking a turn
for the worse.
She'd need to hurry if she was going to make the last train.
Her heels clicked in a rhythmic code as she hurried down the platform. She
stopped at the ticket office, secured her ticket and found a bench to wait.
It was finally time to board. She took one last long look
around the train station her eyes searching, not seeing him. Resolutely she sighed,
got up and boarded the train. A soft rain began and drenched the windows
mirroring how she felt inside. She sat, desolate, staring out the rain
spattered window, not really seeing.
How could I have been so wrong about him?
As the train slowly began to pull out of the station she
leaned her head back, sighed and closed her eyes, a single tear streaking down
her cheek; the only outward sign that
something was wrong. She wiped the tear away with the back of her hand.
If he couldn't even show up he wasn't worth her tears.
Once again she was reminded that she could not be weak and needed
to only count on herself, leaning on him for strength had been a mistake, and
she would do this alone. She could do this. She had to do this.
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As the train pulled farther away from the station it’s
lights becoming smaller and smaller a distraught young man ran out onto the
platform, chest heaving as if he had just finished a marathon. He stood in the now steady rain, soaked to the
skin, watching the taillights of the train disappearing in the worsening storm.
He had missed the train and she was gone.
There was no way to catch it, and he had no way to reach
her. He ran to the ticket office ready
to pay whatever price a ticket on the next train would cost, only to find it
closed.
The last train had left and with it the love of his life,
but she would never know.
He went back into the station and sat down on one of the
benches. He racked his brain trying to figure out what to do next. After a few
moments he got up and headed out to his car, he couldn't find a parking spot
earlier and he'd had to park blocks away. As he walked he formed a plan. He would pack a bag and
drive there, he had no other choice.
Somehow he was going to find her.
That first part was a story in itself. But the second part was the cherry on the Sunday. A great tale. I hope there's a happy ending.
ReplyDeleteThanks dufus! Not quite sure how it would end actually :)
ReplyDeleteWait? Am I on the wrong blog? ::tapping the monitor:: Duke Mom? Is that you? What the heck, Miss Bronte. This is awesome! NO other word, but AWESOME. Wow.
ReplyDeleteThe book, write it. Then sell it to me. Your writing is captivating, really!
May I have some more, please? Nicely done.
awww thanks Skippy!
Delete"Not quite sure how it would end actually" I understand that completely. We have wait and let the characters decide that. After all, its their story. ;)
ReplyDeleteyes- I've never tried my hand at writing like this so I am unfamiliar with the process... feels kind of weird, but at the same time- I like it. :)
ReplyDeleteThis was a really lovely piece of fiction!
ReplyDeletethank you! :)
DeleteOh Barb, this was such a great piece! The sorrow and heartache of the first part, and the heartbreakingly bad timing of the second part all made better by his resolve to find her, no matter what. Great job!
ReplyDeleteOh wow... thanks Ziva I feel like I might want to explore these two and see why this happened- I actually have no idea where it will go...
ReplyDeleteYou should definitely explore the story more! I'd love to see where your subconscious would take it. :)
DeleteOOH.... a little romantic intrigue. I like it!
ReplyDeleteBarb, I really love these fictional stories from you! This is a great piece!
ReplyDeletethanks nicky- I've NEVER tried to write... it is something I have thought about, but never actually tried it- I guess I was afraid it wouldn't be any good...
DeleteNice! What a great surprise to come and read something so lovely.
ReplyDeleteThanks Diane! :)
DeleteWhat? No killing??? It's a train! Just kidding. I liked it. :)
ReplyDeleteVery nice piece and an ending not usually seen. You should continue it. :)
ReplyDeleteYAY! Love it!
ReplyDeleteI'm loving this story line! You totally hooked me. I'm hoping this story continues and continues and continues...
ReplyDeleteI like the scope of this story. It really feels like you're leading us somewhere. I'm looking forward to future installments. :)
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